Since English isn't my strongest subject (even though I LOVE to read) I had a lot of trouble trying to write this poem. The first problem was what I should write about. The second problem was if there should be rhyme. The third problem was how to start the poem. I ended up procrastinating the poem till the last couple days (again!) but I managed to finish it on time. Even though I struggled with the assignment, I got 18/20 points, or an "A" on the poem. I would probably give myself an average grade, but I will post it on my blog and you can give me some feed back! I'd really appreciate it! :)
WARNING!
The following poem was written by Dee.
If copied and sent around the world, the consequences include the FBI!
Thank you.
just kidding!
Please enjoy the poem and if you want, send it around the world.
I really don't care! :)
oh, and please give me some feedback!
It would really help!
Dream Poem
New York is the place I want to be.
With its Broadway, Central Park, and energy.
The bustle of the crowds, so like an anthill.
People on the move, as if on an energy pill.
New York, the place of opportunities,
So many doors opening towards me
Maybe I'll sing on Broadway, or play the violin
Either way, I know I will be as happy as a nightingale, singing
Because I will be in New York, the city that never sleeps
The city that keeps my dreams alive
With its Broadway, Central Park, and energy.
The bustle of the crowds, so like an anthill.
People on the move, as if on an energy pill.
New York, the place of opportunities,
So many doors opening towards me
Maybe I'll sing on Broadway, or play the violin
Either way, I know I will be as happy as a nightingale, singing
Because I will be in New York, the city that never sleeps
The city that keeps my dreams alive
~ Dee
8 comments:
I liked your style. I will say though, you are too critical about yourself. leave that to your parents to do :)
I like the poem. In fact I would have given it 19/20.
Your (not so adoring) Dad
Great job! Really love it. Could do a favor on giving tips.
I loved it--- compliments from one one (great;-))) poet to another are always genuine, no flattery!
Can I pretty please visit you and hear you sing in NY when you are young and on your way to glory and we( ravi mama and I) are not so young and kinda fading?
love
priya aunty
thx everyone!
very funny, Priya Auntie! :)
manni that was really nice..you just kept mum and didn't say all these things.....
"Enna than adakkama" ;)
keep up the good work
Hi this is Alisha Rajdev! I was born a day after you were born, and I still have the pictures of us when we were younger and you came to my 1st birthday! Anyway I would like to say that your dream poem was really good, like totally! You are a great writer! I am starting a blog just like you so we can stay in touch! I loved all your blogs so far, Great Job! <3 Alisha Rajdev:) reply soon!
Nice poem. Noticed the adherance to rhyme in the first para and the freestyle in the second.
Was your mother's classmate in school. I have a daughter aged 9 who considers herself a poet (actually, she writes well and rhymes too).
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